Comments on: “I Need Your Help” NEW! http://24fanfiction.com AgentRez's Fanfiction Based on the Popular Television Show "24" Mon, 06 Sep 2010 11:46:05 +0000 http://wordpress.org/?v=2.7.1 hourly 1 By: Elaine http://24fanfiction.com/stories/help/comment-page-1/#comment-229772 Elaine Wed, 08 Apr 2009 23:16:55 +0000 http://24fanfiction.com/?page_id=373#comment-229772 Nice. I liked that scene too and I was surprised at how Jack reacted. I like the extension here that goes into that. I sort of couldn't see why because I'm such a huge Tony fan and it's like "Angry at Tony?? Whaaaa???" heh :> Buuuuut... it would be improved if you showed more signs of Jack struggling because it's pretty out of character for him to resist agreeing to help that long. In the show he seemed like he didn't want to help cuz he was POed and he just immediately rejected it, but for it to go on that long he'd have to reeaally be clinging to it and blocking out the thought of the people that would die. Nice. I liked that scene too and I was surprised at how Jack reacted. I like the extension here that goes into that. I sort of couldn’t see why because I’m such a huge Tony fan and it’s like “Angry at Tony?? Whaaaa???” heh :>

Buuuuut… it would be improved if you showed more signs of Jack struggling because it’s pretty out of character for him to resist agreeing to help that long. In the show he seemed like he didn’t want to help cuz he was POed and he just immediately rejected it, but for it to go on that long he’d have to reeaally be clinging to it and blocking out the thought of the people that would die.

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